1. Remove the template title
2. The appearance could use some work.
3. The personality section is very short and, while I understand what it is that you are getting out, is a bit drab.
4. Her history is completely focused on her dancing and color guard; there is nothing else fleshed out about her.
5. You have the wrong answer to the question
Overall, it mostly needs some editing work (sentence structure, punctuation and whatnot). Correct things as stated and I'll check back again.