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| Subject: Biker. ( Ready. ) June 1st 2014, 9:02 pm | |
| Name:Biker. Weapon:N/A Gender:Male. History:Biker was not a good man. He drank, smoked, and he gambled. He couldent hold a relationship with a woman for the life of him either. But he was always a good older brother. His brother "Sue" always did his best to get into trouble. So Biker always had to work overtime to bail him out. But they loved each other, until the car accident. Sue was always distant after that. They stopped talking at hardly at all. But then Biker got a call from Sue. He was in deep debt from some high interest loans he had to take out with some... less than reputable sources. Biker said he would be right there, then hopped on his bike and drove over from miami. When he got there they made up a plan to go to where Jacket took out the loan and politely request a one month time extension. To say the least it went wrong. They went down, sat at the big bosses desk and made their request. But mr.boss did not want to wait a day more as Sue had already been given three extra months already. He demanded payment right now and had his men come in to reinforce this message. After that... Biker only remembers static. Well... bits and bobs. Taking out the cleaver ( That he had in his Leather jacket for just such an occasion. ) cutting through the bosses skull and brain. Turning to deal with the other guys.... slamming one of their heads into the floor... Eating their souls in a rage and going downstairs to finish the job... When he woke up there were limbs all over the building and sue had to help him into the car to get away. They REALLY did not talk after that with the horrible secret of what Biker had to do to save Sue. He was a kishen egg now, and you can't walk away from that. But biker put his degree to good use and got a job as a computer programmer. Taking home a nice salary. Almost a year later Biker got the news, Sue was dead. His head cut in half by another kishen egg. " Archangel. " as it was. Not that he wasn't begging for it but Biker was still incredibly angry. He put on his motorcycle helmet and left a note on his door saying he was not returning. He was on the warpath now. When he got to Sue's house his roommates let him in. Biker checked the voicemail and found the message from project freelancer telling Sue to go to the hospital. Now he had two targets. The bastards that called him and the bastard that killed him. He suited up and for the second time in his life could only see static, he drove down to the academy checked the place out that sent those killers after his brother and now had three. But those foes would have to wait for another day. He started up his bike and went back to the place of his first murder. Got up, and drew his cleaver. Because for all the people he killed there all the souls he ate... He wanted more. Abilities:Abilities | Description | # of souls | Static madness. | The same madness his brother Jacket developed. The more he kills the more powerful he becomes. This has a side effect of him losing time. If he does it in battle he will likely only see flashes of his body going on full murder mode. He is arguably more dangerous when his vision turns to static because there is no thinking, only action. | 15 | Miscellaneous: Biker wields a meat cleaver and has three throwing knives ready to throw. If you are wondering why he is called "biker" it is because his real name is so unbelievably feminine, so grossly unmasculine, so female he will never tell a soul and downright cut anyone who calls him by it. Have you read the rules:I love soul eater!
Last edited by jac600 on June 1st 2014, 10:31 pm; edited 6 times in total |
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LeolaniLiaMay Admin
Posts : 12643 Join date : 2014-04-20
| Subject: Re: Biker. ( Ready. ) June 1st 2014, 9:18 pm | |
| I will not accept this until it has been completely revised for grammar and spelling mistakes.
Also, he has too many weapons. Take the meat cleavers out; I will let you have, at most, ONE of those meat cleavers. The knives can stay, and you can have two SHORT katanas on his back. I won't look at anything else until you change this. |
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Guest Guest
| Subject: Re: Biker. ( Ready. ) June 1st 2014, 9:25 pm | |
| Totally revised for spelling errors. Can he have a katana, a cleaver, and five knives designed for throwing? Three if not that? |
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Guest Guest
| Subject: Re: Biker. ( Ready. ) June 1st 2014, 9:33 pm | |
| Katana OR Cleaver, not both. You can always get one in thread, but you can't start with both. For that matter, how can he AFFORD a katana? Those things are expensive, especially battle quality ones. |
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Guest Guest
| Subject: Re: Biker. ( Ready. ) June 1st 2014, 9:36 pm | |
| Biker actually had a pretty good job before he went on the warpath. He was a computer programmer and made $108,000 a year. I choose cleaver though. |
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LeolaniLiaMay Admin
Posts : 12643 Join date : 2014-04-20
| Subject: Re: Biker. ( Ready. ) June 1st 2014, 9:38 pm | |
| You still have spelling errors (such as drinked).
Refer to Beetle for weapons. The knives are fine regardless. |
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Guest Guest
| Subject: Re: Biker. ( Ready. ) June 1st 2014, 9:41 pm | |
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LeolaniLiaMay Admin
Posts : 12643 Join date : 2014-04-20
| Subject: Re: Biker. ( Ready. ) June 1st 2014, 9:42 pm | |
| Jac, get on google docs, copy and paste your entire sheet into it, and then see what it says about your spelling. "Drunked" and "drinked" are not words. |
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Guest Guest
| Subject: Re: Biker. ( Ready. ) June 1st 2014, 9:43 pm | |
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| Subject: Re: Biker. ( Ready. ) June 1st 2014, 9:44 pm | |
| Okay, after asking around, that amount is WAAY to high for a computer programmer to be paid.
The average is about $74,280. Further, that is something you kinda need to add to your bio. Anyways, link me to the doc. |
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Guest Guest
| Subject: Re: Biker. ( Ready. ) June 1st 2014, 9:44 pm | |
| DRANK! DRANK!!! HOW COULD I BE SO STUPID! |
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Guest Guest
| Subject: Re: Biker. ( Ready. ) June 1st 2014, 10:05 pm | |
| Lady's and gentle men. Fresh from google docs with new edited to everything mentioned, BIKER! |
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Guest Guest
| Subject: Re: Biker. ( Ready. ) June 1st 2014, 10:05 pm | |
| Jac, Lani was helping me with a character earlier. If you want, you can PM me or any of the other admins or mods with their permission for some help. I've got Gia's history pretty much fully organized because of Lani's help. c: |
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Guest Guest
| Subject: Re: Biker. ( Ready. ) June 1st 2014, 10:07 pm | |
| I will definitely do that after biker gets throttled by arch angel.
Last edited by jac600 on June 1st 2014, 10:09 pm; edited 1 time in total |
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Guest Guest
| Subject: Re: Biker. ( Ready. ) June 1st 2014, 10:07 pm | |
| I think you mean "definitely" |
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SERP Admin Admin
Posts : 6659 Join date : 2013-05-15
| Subject: Re: Biker. ( Ready. ) June 1st 2014, 10:20 pm | |
| I call bullshit to you putting this through a g doc. So many words are misspelled, and there're still a good amount of grammatical errors. So, thanks but no thanks. |
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Guest Guest
| Subject: Re: Biker. ( Ready. ) June 1st 2014, 10:32 pm | |
| I put it through again and weeded out what you were talking about. The misspellings did not turn red for some reason. Maybe it is because I am on Ipad. |
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Guest Guest
| Subject: Re: Biker. ( Ready. ) June 3rd 2014, 6:02 pm | |
| Is there anything else you need me to do? |
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Guest Guest
| Subject: Re: Biker. ( Ready. ) June 3rd 2014, 6:29 pm | |
| Can't think of anything. Though maybe you should consider giving him a different powerset, considering how his goal is to kill ArchAngel and all, and how archangel ganked Jacket pretty easily. |
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Guest Guest
| Subject: Re: Biker. ( Ready. ) June 3rd 2014, 7:00 pm | |
| Yes, he will get the ability to charge weapons with his wavelength to cut through armor. ( When he is angry enough) A red shield similar to benny's that get stronger with his rage. His defense will be directly boosted with souls. And I am planning on making him a partial agent in Project freelancer, so he will get a robo bike and sifi helmet. Unless Archangel kicks in the door again on his first thread and crushes him beneath one mighty boot. His first thread will take place in the slums of Miami, so a battalion of death Scythes don't kick in the door immediately. |
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Guest Guest
| Subject: Re: Biker. ( Ready. ) June 3rd 2014, 7:02 pm | |
| They still can, just don't let things get too out of hand, or inform people who control death scythes like you just have. |
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Guest Guest
| Subject: Re: Biker. ( Ready. ) June 3rd 2014, 7:11 pm | |
| Yeah ima keep this on the down low.... Is Biker ready to be accepted? |
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Guest Guest
| Subject: Re: Biker. ( Ready. ) June 3rd 2014, 7:18 pm | |
| Okay, talked it over with an Admin. They feel it best if you slowed down on making characters for the time being, due to how many have been killed/dropped recently. Basically, consider it a suspended period. Don't worry, it'll probably be short. |
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| Subject: Re: Biker. ( Ready. ) June 3rd 2014, 7:20 pm | |
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Lethein Honorary Staff
Posts : 1446 Join date : 2014-05-17 Age : 28 Location : Lurking is my Aesthetic
| Subject: Re: Biker. ( Ready. ) June 3rd 2014, 7:29 pm | |
| Jac,
Especially given that the debate on accepting this character has stretched onto (at least) a second page, we are putting your character creation privileges on temporary suspension. This is happening because:
1. You have recently had at least three characters die in combat/in character. 2. You have recently dropped/abandoned (put up for adoption) several characters. 3. You still have characters that have multiple weapon forms and/or other rule breaking. 4. We would like you to put more focus on your writing and character development with your existing characters.
Until we believe that you have properly amended these discrepancies, your suspension stands.
-SERP Admin. |
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